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Hi there, would anyone like to help give feedback on an essay I wrote about marketing strategies.I really need help in determining if the analysis and structure is effective and also which paragraph/s could be eliminated. Thank you! please let me know.

The Qantas group pilot academy is one of the best ways to get into aviation (Fly for airlines), the program however has over 22 000 applicants each year which makes it very competitive. Could someone please recommend ways of being selected into the program, I have heard that you need a decent...