Creative Response (1 Viewer)

[^CoSMic DoRiS^^]

we have to do a creative composition which reflects the concept of changing perspective. I chose to do a story and was wondering if someone could read it and give me some feedback on how well it shows the idea. thanks! (hopefully the file attachment will work lol)

 

[kami]

I think that it is a very good attempt, and a wonderful piece of writing considering this is preliminary advanced. The first half or third of your story is the strongest part, but in the second half near where her depression climaxes and then she becomes self aware, it becomes less polished I suppose is the best way to say it, all I could advise is to play around with a few of the words, especially in the letter, otherwise it does everything it should IMO.

 

[m_isk]

what's IMO?

 

[kami]

In My Opinion...