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[gerg tenrab 07]

hey guys

i need some feedback on my speech

thanks

 

[-pari-]

hey gerg_tenrab

i just had a quick skim through, but before making any comments, i thought it'd be useful to know the question you've been given? & also any other conditions of what should be included etc....

 

[gerg tenrab 07]

hmmmm yer that would probally help

the speech has to be about an imaginative journey either you have experienced or has been the experience of another that has shaped the lives of the person(s) who experienced the journey.

i need to talk about the impact on the person(s), the message that was learnt, and how this journey relates to the ideas expressed in either a coleridge poem or something from the stimulus booklet.

the imaginative journey can be of a character from a book or a movie

 

[-pari-]

for what you've said is required, i think your speech is quite good

if you're looking for changes, one thing that did come to mind was perhaps a little more on the actual imaginative journey that edward took....

does that make sense?

the conclusion also seems a bit sudden...
other than that i think its all good

oh but i will mention i dont do imaginative journeys myself. but i dont think the expectations vary a great deal from journey to journey, but yeah...