My English Test Comment (1 Viewer)

[kazan]

ok so i got 7/15

the comment was, a basic story line, but needs structure and style, lacks proper setting out,

i get the setting out and structure points, but how do you develop style?

could someone please give me a question to practice on?
prefably something that could be completed in 40 minutes

thanx

 

[waddle_828]

what was the question?

 

[kazan]

you had to read this paragraph about, a business being forced to change, and they tell a "funny" story about how that change came across them, and you had to use the sentecne "where is my cheese"

 

[^CoSMic DoRiS^^]

that sounds kinda weird. i guess developing style would mean things like imagery, techinques and how well you link scenes? like for example, instead of saying "the man walked down the road" say something like "the balding man sauntered casually down the newly sealed road, pausing now and then to reflect." or something. i dunno. as for a question maybe you should just have a go at the one you have again until you're satisfied.

 

[A l]

you had to read this paragraph about, a business being forced to change, and they tell a "funny" story about how that change came across them, and you had to use the sentecne "where is my cheese"

The question you've described, is strangely in close association with Section II of the following:
http://www.boredofstudies.org/cours...(Area_of_Study)_T_Smiths_Hill_Smiths_Hill.pdf