Poetry down here? (1 Viewer)

[DjSmiG]

i was wondering is this a place to put ones poetry like stuff we have written or should there be one made up

 

[sped_kid01]

post urs away....

 

[DjSmiG]

ok kool its a bit raunchy and stuff

so id like feedback

Creating fabulous sights..with hands on your thighs...
I begin expanding the prize with a plan to surprise...
Imagine our lives, just picture perfection in motion...
Your fingers rubbing the thick erection with lotion...
Stick to sex with emotion, screams and cries of joy...
Sighs deploy.. involved in actions you and I enjoy...
Our minds employed..thoughts of freaky positions...
Physique in condition, crazy techniques and traditions...
With the speech of musicians, hearts beat to the sound...
Heat will surround, feet on the ground as she turns around...
Sheets arent unwound, and our legs tangled in the slack... Secretions dangle to the sack with an angle from the back... Strangling her rack, rubbing her nipples with my fingers...
No interruptions, cut the phone lines..crippling the ringers...
The tickling will linger, on for days...nights and weeks... Quite unique, moaning so strong she has to fight to speak...
Ignite the peak, bed rocking from the orgasmic height...
Memorial sex, she keeps talking of the fantastic night..
. Sparking from the evening you wore my jumper in the park... Letters and remarks led me to show u that its better in the dark... What I said to her embarked the opposite of regrets you get...
Let sweat prove it..turn fantasy into reality baby and lets do it...

 

[sped_kid01]

hah! i like it...i dont like some parts, but yeah its kinda cool

 

[Trippendicular]

ok kool its a bit raunchy and stuff

so id like feedback

Creating fabulous sights..with hands on your thighs...
I begin expanding the prize with a plan to surprise...
Imagine our lives, just picture perfection in motion...
Your fingers rubbing the thick erection with lotion...
Stick to sex with emotion, screams and cries of joy...
Sighs deploy.. involved in actions you and I enjoy...
Our minds employed..thoughts of freaky positions...
Physique in condition, crazy techniques and traditions...
With the speech of musicians, hearts beat to the sound...
Heat will surround, feet on the ground as she turns around...
Sheets arent unwound, and our legs tangled in the slack... Secretions dangle to the sack with an angle from the back... Strangling her rack, rubbing her nipples with my fingers...
No interruptions, cut the phone lines..crippling the ringers...
The tickling will linger, on for days...nights and weeks... Quite unique, moaning so strong she has to fight to speak...
Ignite the peak, bed rocking from the orgasmic height...
Memorial sex, she keeps talking of the fantastic night..
. Sparking from the evening you wore my jumper in the park... Letters and remarks led me to show u that its better in the dark... What I said to her embarked the opposite of regrets you get...
Let sweat prove it..turn fantasy into reality baby and lets do it...

May I suggest you try masturbation? Its a much more effective vehicle through which to vent your powerful sexual feelings and urges

 

[my sharona]

ok kool its a bit raunchy and stuff

so id like feedback

Creating fabulous sights..with hands on your thighs...
I begin expanding the prize with a plan to surprise...
Imagine our lives, just picture perfection in motion...
Your fingers rubbing the thick erection with lotion...
Stick to sex with emotion, screams and cries of joy...
Sighs deploy.. involved in actions you and I enjoy...
Our minds employed..thoughts of freaky positions...
Physique in condition, crazy techniques and traditions...
With the speech of musicians, hearts beat to the sound...
Heat will surround, feet on the ground as she turns around...
Sheets arent unwound, and our legs tangled in the slack... Secretions dangle to the sack with an angle from the back... Strangling her rack, rubbing her nipples with my fingers...
No interruptions, cut the phone lines..crippling the ringers...
The tickling will linger, on for days...nights and weeks... Quite unique, moaning so strong she has to fight to speak...
Ignite the peak, bed rocking from the orgasmic height...
Memorial sex, she keeps talking of the fantastic night..
. Sparking from the evening you wore my jumper in the park... Letters and remarks led me to show u that its better in the dark... What I said to her embarked the opposite of regrets you get...
Let sweat prove it..turn fantasy into reality baby and lets do it...

That is not poetry... but maybe you have a future as a rap song writer?

 

[sped_kid01]

lol, no to be a rap writer, it would have to have "bitch" and "hoe" written SEVERAL more times...

 

[DjSmiG]

well i wasnt far off being a rapper, i worked for a company called AON All Or Nothin' Entertainment lol writing songs for shitty rappers, to make it big one came out of the company Baby Bash..

Masturbatingg,,,, hmmm have done that, far prgressed, im into the fucking older women stage, ohwell u might get there one day, 25 yrs old is my limit or yummy mummies but nah ive got more,

 

[sped_kid01]

ok, now ur just gross

 

[DjSmiG]

hahaha im so like joking !!! come on its an ok thing for like 15 minutes, can you write?

 

[Tulipa]

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