Yeh, there are various ways to spin things. Change around the timing, whatever. Trust me i am as tempted as you to write a piece that I feel is excellent. However it just seems that the markers are to ordinary to appreciate these things. They are old, out-dated. I am sure the first Shakespeare...
A really good text that goes un-noticed is 'breaking free.'
Its a movie from 1979, it won an oscar, and follows the life of an australian cyclist trying to make the italian team. haha. Funny to watch, largely under-used, and easily analysed.
Agree'd. You may consider yourself a genius (dont we all) but the basic rules are always good to go through. Remember, believe it or not, the markers dont want a 'brand new form of writing.' You will get good marks doing what your told, and doing it damn well. An exposition, a complication etc...
You could probably create a monologue yourself, by reading the book, or analysing it whatever. Are you talking about the ancient 'Alice' or the new Tim Burton one? Becuase the Tim Burton one focuses on what happened the second time ALice went down the rabbit hole. Perhaps you could use both...