another frontline essay review (1 Viewer)

[freaking_out]

hey, i've attached my frontline essay, and i would like to know if it was good, and how much marks do u reckon i can get....

note: i have put certain comments in side square brackets '[]'


thanx.

 

[TastesGoodBut]

all i can say is that i doubt u can write all of that in 40 mins...

 

[freaking_out]

Originally posted by TastesGoodBut
all i can say is that i doubt u can write all of that in 40 mins...

true, coz thats what i'm gonna memorise...so in exam i'll b cutting off according to the question.

 

[freaking_out]

Originally posted by TastesGoodBut
all i can say is that i doubt u can write all of that in 40 mins...

hey, btw, how much words, can an average person write in 40mins?

 

[~TeLEpAtHeTiC~]

i can write 23 lecture pages lol
as proved in my paper 2 essays

crazy shit went down that day

 

[freaking_out]

Originally posted by ~TeLEpAtHeTiC~
i can write 23 lecture pages lol
as proved in my paper 2 essays

crazy shit went down that day

?? do u mean the hsc booklets?...what about word count wise?

 

[~TeLEpAtHeTiC~]

nah as in lecture pads..u know the ones..

up word wise..i hav noo idea..dont really plan on counting em either..probs around 800 - 1200

 

[allyteaded]

I hope I don't get in trouble for this...

I was lazy and couldn't be bothered typing up so much -

I just printed out the essay and put comments around it, scanned it and I'm posting it here as a .gif image.

I hope you can read my writing. Neh... Sorry I couldn't do it all... I'm really sleepy!! *yaaawwwnssss*

I had to cut it in bits - I didn't want the file to be too big. Cuz I tried uploading a large image once - my internet froze up and I waited twenty friggin minutes for it to just fail... argh...

Here's three quarters of page one

 

[allyteaded]

The rest of page 1...

 

[allyteaded]

And half of page 2...

Sorry if I seem like I'm taking the role of a teacher even though I'm really not a teacher - I hope you know - I'm just throwing in suggestions from my little pocket of knowledge. (..well, rather, I'm mimicking how my english teacher marks and the comments he usually puts on my work.)

I am also open to criticism for my criticism... cuz it will in turn help me know what's not getting me full marks.

 

[freaking_out]

hey thanks, allyteaded....its cool how u went to the full extent to mark it. i appreciate it, and will have a look at the comments.