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hbk_ace

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Unrequited feelings for you is driving me insane,
but its crystal clear u dont even give a damn.
First time i saw you my heart danced,
god damit what well make u understand.

Put myself up to take the bullet,
I even set up to sing you a ballad.
The trigger you pulled pierced it into pieces,
made it shatter and brake, like tears rolling down faces.

Pretend like everything is all good?
Just stomped on all the broken bits.
You superficial bitch, all u really want is wood.
But my feelings for you are still dimly lit.

How cold it is of u to flirt when im there,
after knowing its something i could not bare.
You were the world and more,
but now your nothing but a whore.

i might be jealous, i might be down
but it will no longer have me Fuckn frown.
Tonight i blow out this dimly lit candle,
You just lost the guy that would hold up ure cradle.
 
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aww thats so sweet! did u write it or steal it from somewhere?:p
 

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Did you write that or what? Its awesome you should make it into a song
 

hbk_ace

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yea i wrote it, haha i write poems when i hit emotional extremes

and this girl i liked from the start of the year, thats wat happend,
i asked her out, she came up with the lames excuse ever (which is like i just dont want to see anyone i wannna be friends), then she just pretend everything is ok, then not speak to me, and like yersterday she just flirt with guy shes never meet at a party, so yea, now i wrote that im over it completely

before u girls start to critisiz me and sayin shes just been nice and the excuse was her tryin to be nice. i say WHAT EVER (Wat an arguement hay),
 

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If I were you I would leave my art ambiguous and unexplained. Sounds to me like she don't want a relationship, but that doesnt mean flirting isnt allowed. Flirting with new ppl is the most fun.......its like how a relationship with a girl is at its best right at the start when everything is new..........
 

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ure proabbly right cactus, but meh,
the fact she knew wat she was doin,

haha im just bitter and jealous atm, but dont mock the poetry,
the poem and its composer are seperate, judge the poem on its own merites and how u relate to it, not how it relates to the composer
 

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w00t time to unload some bitter evil love poetry ;)

Jealousy
Jealousy is a peculiar flame,
For it burns a brightly copper-green,
In pursuit of sweet maiden same,
I hear envy creep, anger seen.

then four lines which don't work well, so i'll omit

In Hell, my love, despairing, burns.
A torn heart shredded by sight,
With false smiles, I hide and turn,
The scene blocked, take flight.
Know this, Cruel World, emotion is void,
With that, the emotion, Love, destroyed.

i really need to work on those missing four lines. can't do them well :(.

dun worry hbk... you'll find another.
 

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Heh I dont write love poetry but I do write poetry... chack my work in my nick. The closest thing I have to love poems are there... umm some are pretty... ummm angst. Just thought I'd warn you if your interested.
 

hbk_ace

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haha hi frigid, some one our generationis still hanging around
 

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hbk_ace said:
haha hi frigid, some one our generationis still hanging around
old bitter bastards from '03? i think we've become relics. always been here, always will be. any more poetry?

edit: i wanna put my suicide story here:

‘DEATH, BY A BLADE’

The room was dark, the curtains closed.

A banker's light shone, a soft green shell over fake anodised brass. The room was disorganised, sordid and dusty. Books lay piled up: Latin, Maths, English books. School books – it was a student’s dorm. The bed was in the corner, dominating a quarter of the room. Blue, the colour of melancholy, painted the room in its sad, quiet tone.

A solitary figure sat. He was typing on the keyboard, eyes glued to the monitor. Time ticked by: useless time, idle time, time that never seemed to be. The monitor’s bright glow hit his face; Windows stared blankly, obediently displaying each word for its master.

These are words he never said. Maybe she won’t read them when he’s dead, he thought. But he will have done the deed and he wished to tell her.

Humans are stupid, sorry creatures. Unlike other animals, they possess so much untapped power – to think, to comprehend, to react. To plan their own death, even. Sometimes I wish I grew old enough to know the fullness of humanity, albeit I am sick with what little I have now. It disgusts me…

The alarm clock gave a small beep. He glanced at it. Red, blood-red digits stood out against the black background.

Midnight; the hour of the undead.
Or, as he thought, the hour of the about-to-die.

***

He turned around and picked it up: smooth, black leather, a knife sheath. How good was it to touch skin, even this dead skin? He ran his two fingers across the texture intimately, caressing the skin, touching, feeling… like love… no, like fucking … she was like a whore, this sheath… the skin felt good, smelt good…

He grasped her tightly on one end: she wasn’t all skin anymore. He felt the hard rubber, the grip of a knife. The friction of the rubber clung onto him; he felt the sweat build in his palm. He hesitated one moment, as if to take the proverbial deep breath. It was like waiting for your first date, wondering if she’ll come, wondering if you’ll make a fool of yourself or not.

He slid the knife out. Death stared him in the face.

In moonlight, he imagined he saw a goddess beckoning in the reflection of the blade. She was tempting him, encouraging him, daring him. She smiled, laughed, even blew him a kiss. Then she transformed into a wretched skull, a cackling witch, a winged devil, calling him a coward for his hesitance.

He pushed it away and then looked at it again.

She was gone. He was alone, alone to do his deed.

The moment came… he lifted the blade away from his chest… aimed with a practice swing inwards… withdrew… and stabbed.

The frog was crudely cut up. Tomorrow she, his Biology teacher, will scold him for not using a scalpel.
 
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hbk_ace

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it seems all other 03ers has found a happy patch in their life man,
no, i only write poetry when im total emotional, now ive written that its like all the steam is out,
 

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oh oh i love these. i haven't made one in ages but heres an old one.

de Leng - hostage

will you write, if wrote you letters?
would you reply, until i get home?
if i should die, and live among angels
would you be crying all alone?

you cry, silently watching
as i pack, dressed up in khakis
straighten my hat, i kiss you softly
i walk out the door with my rifle on my back

will time help me to fly?
or take me to die, for my country?
will i be shot down?
will the enermy surround me?
will i live out this war?

bullets fly all around me
can i strike, just out of reach?
will i hold on, will i love you always?
even from six-feet underneath?

will time help me to fly?
or take me to die, for you honey?
will i be shot down?
will you surround me?
can i live out your lie?

stuck on the end of your war machine
oh god can you hide all the screams
now i'm stuck on the edge and tied to a noose
sick to my stomach
you fake what you mean
cause you lying fiend
i'm sick of your secrets
cause your love was a lie, and you are the noose
tell me the truth, will you cut me loose?
so you came a long, and admitted the truth
yeah you came along, finally cut me loose.


this song uses coldplay - amsterdam with the lyrics replaced. seriously i cannot be bother coming up with my own instrumental piece and well people like music to go with the lyrics so here you go.
 

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hbk_ace said:
it seems all other 03ers has found a happy patch in their life man,
LOL.

i bet you the other 03ers who haven't found a "cabbage patch" yet are still waiting for the 04ers to finish their HSC. ;)
 

hbk_ace

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hahaha

not true, ure already doin that, im not cutting ure grass.

i just dont have anything to do so i come back on here and see wats happening, oh and pent my anger and sadness
 

hbk_ace

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what are u saying babydoll??

hahaha all the unsw commerce guys are sad?? how do u know i did commerce

hey neeja, so many familiar faces lol

this is me "boom boom, boom boom, boom boom, SPLAT!!! ............ SQUISH SQUISH"
 

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