Creative Writing- can someone advise where to improve in this story (1 Viewer)

[mtsmahia]

Can someone read my Creative Writing and advise where to improve?

Hi Guys,

I recently had a Belonging exam, i got 12/15 , 13/15 and 7/15
That 7/15 is for Creative Writing.

I was wandering if anyone was willing to read my Creative and advise on where to improve, the idea or expression. And if anyone can ( I know im asking too much) please send me an example of a good belonging creative writing (if u want to) so I can compare with my own.

I will pm the story to the people who are willing to help me Please say below if u are willing to see it

Thanks heaps !

 

[breeza92]

if you want me to try and help- il be more than happy to

 

[Aerath]

Yeah, I wouldn't mind reading it. I can send you an example of one my mine that I wrote for my HSC (2009) if you want as well.

 

[gesh17]

Yeah, I'll give it a read. We had a similar assessment and I thought my creative was pretty good.

 

[Aerath]

Also, to your PM - your story must have fit the stimulus. Your writing was excellent - however, it means jack all if had no relevance to your stimulus.