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I need someone to please fix up the language on my essay...

[FONT='Arial','sans-serif']Images can create meaning through a range of techniques. The prescribed text Baz Luhrmann’s “Strictly Ballroom” and related material Edvard’s Munch “The Scream” uses a variety of techniques to help bring out meaning. In the beginning of the film “Strictly Ballroom” Luhrmann has deliberately maded the scene look like a fantasy. We find our main character Scott as being a rebel against the dance federation, Luhrmann uses costume and other technique to show how different Scott is to the world of ballroom dancing. Camera shots are used to establish Fran as being a “goofy dancer” or the “ugly duckling” but through Scotts and hers experiences she becomes a successful dancer. The two main characters dancing on the roof creates a contrast of the two worlds, fantasy world and the simple life. This shown through the background and camera shot. Luhrmann also uses camera angles to show power of characters over others. Barry Fife is the bad guy in this story. Luhrmann uses a colour, camera shots and other technique to show his authority over everyone, at the end he is defeated and it’s a happily ever after story like a fantasy. Edvard Munch’s “The Scream” is a painting that some say is suppose to symbolize human’s existential angst. Edvard Munch has used colour and facial expression to bring out meaning to the painting.[/FONT][FONT='Arial','sans-serif'][/FONT]
[FONT='Arial','sans-serif']Firstly Luhrmann purposely made “Strictly Ballroom” look like a fantasy. The opening scene represents a theatre. A curtain lifts up and “Strictly Ballroom” is written in sparkling font. We can see a silhouette of characters through a door as it opens and we can see the characters dancing the waltz. We can then see that the dancers are actually in a competition as the background turns into a hall with a crowd cheering the performance and each character has a number on them. The costumes and make up of the characters are glittery and glamous. This also reinforces the effect that it is a fantasy.[/FONT]
[FONT='Arial','sans-serif']Another technique that brings out meaning in Luhrmann’s “Strictly Ballroom” is the way Luhrmann makes Scott, our main character different to the world of ballroom dancing. We first recognize Scott when he dances his own steps in the beginning of the movie. His mother is crying out for him not to be different and then Barry Fife the judge of the competition says “Sure you can dance any steps you like, it doesn’t mean you’ll… win” Scott then loses and is crushed. The next scene we see him in the mirror trying to work out what is wrong with him. His costume reveals that he is different to the world of ballroom dancing, he wears a white singlet and black pants. In the world of ballroom dancing the dancers are always wearing make up and glamorous sparkling clothing. We then see Fran who is also different to the world of ballroom dancing as she doesn’t fit in. So you can see Luhrmann uses costume and movement techniques to show that Scott is different, a rebel even.[/FONT]
[FONT='Arial','sans-serif']The next technique to bring meaning into Luhrmann “Strictly Ballroom” is the use of camera shots. Luhrmann uses camera shots to emphasise Fran as being the goofy dancer or “ugly duckling”. Luhrmann uses a close up of her talking to show her dimples and blotchiness in her skin. Luhrmann also uses costume to represent her as the “ugly duckling”. She wears a long daggy pink top andand baggy pants. Luhrmann also gave Fran glasses and fizzy hair to give to the illusion that she is a goofy dancer. Scott finally accepts Fran invitation to be his partner and Fran slowly transforms into a successful dancer. During this transformation, Luhrmann fixes her custome to be less daggy. We know when it is the end of the transformation when Scott tells Fran to take off her glasses. Then they dance on the roof as it contrasts between two worlds. So through the costume and camera shots you can see how Luhrmann can bring out meaning to Fran being the ugly duckling.[/FONT]
[FONT='Arial','sans-serif']Luhrmann uses the background to contrast between the two worlds of Scott’s ballroom dancing and Fran’s simple life. The background has a glittery coka-cola sign to signify ballroom dancing and all it’s glamour. While the clothesline is used to show the simple life. The coka-cola sign stands out more than the clothesline, Luhrmann has done to say that everyone in the simple life would want to be a part of the glamorous world of ballroom dancing but then theres a crane shot as the camera moves to a long shot of the city, this contrasts with the simple life wanting to be in the glamorous world of ballroom dancing as it proves there is more out there than ballroom dancing. At the pan pacifics the Scott’s mum and other ballroom dancers find out that Fran is Scott’s new partner and tries to convince her that if she does Scott won’t win. So to sum up Luhrmann uses the background to contrast between the world of ballroom dancing and the simple life.[/FONT]
[FONT='Arial','sans-serif']Meanwhile as Fran is being convinced to stop being partners with Scott we can that Luhrmann uses high and low angle shots to show authority and power of Scott’s mother and the other dancing over Fran. As they talk there is a low angle on Scott’s mother and the other dancer to represent they have power and in Fran’s reply there is a high angle to make Fran look small. Fran then decides to leave the pan pacifics so Scott can win the tournament with Tina Sparkle. Another person who has authority is Barry Fife the president of the dance federation. All in all, Luhrmann uses high and low angle shots to dignify who has power over Fran.[/FONT]
[FONT='Arial','sans-serif']As said before Barry Fife is the president of the dance federation. He is the bad guy of this movie we first see him when Scott dances his own steps in a tournament. “Sure you can dnace any steps you like, it doesn’t mean you… (close up of his mouth and the screen loses lighting) win” The reason why Barry Fife doesn’t want anyone to dance new steps is because he believes “If you don’t know the steps, you can’t teach it and we’ll all be out of a bloody job” [/FONT]
 

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stormz89 said:
I need someone to please fix up the language on my essay...

[FONT='Arial','sans-serif']Images (cut out can) creates meaning through a range of techniques. The prescribed text Baz Luhrmann’s “Strictly Ballroom” and related material (what text type is it? drawing/movie/story??) Edvard’s Munch “The Scream” uses a variety of techniques to help bring out meaning. In ('the beginning of the film'...use 'the opening scenes' - sounds better) “Strictly Ballroom” Luhrmann has deliberately made the scene look like a fantasy (what do u mean by 'fantasy' - what are the characteristics of a fantasy? using what techniques?) We find our main character Scott as being a rebel against the dance federation - (dont use words such as 'we' and 'i' - keep it objective) Luhrmann uses costume and other technique to show how different Scott is to the world of ballroom dancing. Camera shots (be more specific...what type of camera shots? then expand into it later in the discussion) are used to establish Fran as being a - through the dialogue “goofy dancer” or the “ugly duckling” but through Scotts and hers experiences she becomes a successful dancer.The two main characters dancing on the roof creates a contrast of the two worlds, fantasy world and the simple life. This is shown through the background and camera shot. (again..what camera shot?) Luhrmann also uses camera angles to show power of characters over others. Barry Fife is the bad guy in this story. Luhrmann uses a colour (what colour? v. important to say as colour often conveys a msg to the audience) camera shots and other technique to show his authority over everyone, at the end he is defeated and it’s a happily ever after story like a fantasy. Edvard Munch’s “The Scream” is a painting that some say is suppose to symbolize human’s existential angst. Edvard Munch has used colour and facial expression to bring out meaning to the painting.[/font][FONT='Arial','sans-serif'][/font]
[FONT='Arial','sans-serif']Firstly Luhrmann purposely made “Strictly Ballroom” look like a fantasy. The opening scene represents a theatre. bit more description... A curtain lifts up and “Strictly Ballroom” is written in sparkling font. We can see a silhouette of characters through a door as it opens and we can see the characters dancing the waltz. We can then see that the dancers are actually in a competition as the background turns into a hall with a crowd cheering the performance and each character has a number on them. The costumes and make up of the characters are glittery and glamous. This also reinforces the effect that it is a fantasy.[/font] -> theres a bit too much story telling...tighten up the screws

[FONT='Arial','sans-serif']Another technique that brings out meaning in Luhrmann’s “Strictly Ballroom” is the way Luhrmann makes Scott (or 'the techniques implemented by luhrmann') our main character different to the world of ballroom dancing. We first recognize Scott when he dances his own steps in the beginning of the movie. His mother is crying out for him not to be different and then Barry Fife the judge of the competition says (again get to the point...no story telling and use techniques in ur essay e.g. 'Through the dialogue of such and such [insert it] “Sure you can dance any steps you like, it doesn’t mean you’ll… win” Scott then loses and is crushed. The next scene we see him in the mirror trying to work out what is wrong with him. His costume reveals that he is different to the world of ballroom dancing, he wears a white singlet and black pants. In the world of ballroom dancing the dancers are always wearing make up and glamorous sparkling clothing. We then see Fran who is also different to the world of ballroom dancing as she doesn’t fit in. So you can see Luhrmann uses costume and movement techniques to show that Scott is different, a rebel even.[/font]

[FONT='Arial','sans-serif']The next technique to bring meaning into Luhrmann “Strictly Ballroom” is the use of camera shots. Luhrmann uses camera shots to emphasise Fran as being the goofy dancer or “ugly duckling”. Luhrmann uses a close up of her talking to show her dimples and blotchiness in her skin. Luhrmann also uses costume to represent her as the “ugly duckling”. She wears a long daggy pink top andand baggy pants. Luhrmann also gave Fran glasses and fizzy hair to give to the illusion that she is a goofy dancer. Scott finally accepts Fran invitation to be his partner and Fran slowly transforms into a successful dancer. During this transformation, Luhrmann fixes her custome to be less daggy - (a broad generalisation..what do u mean? We know when it is the end of the transformation when Scott tells Fran to take off her glasses. Then they dance on the roof as it contrasts between two worlds. So through the costume and camera shots you can see how Luhrmann can bring out meaning to Fran being the ugly duckling.[/font]

[FONT='Arial','sans-serif']Luhrmann uses the background to contrast between the two worlds of Scott’s ballroom dancing and Fran’s simple life. The background has a glittery coka-cola sign to signify ballroom dancing and all it’s glamour. While the clothesline is used to show the simple life. The coka-cola sign stands out more than the clothesline, Luhrmann has done to say that everyone in the simple life would want to be a part of the glamorous world of ballroom dancing but then theres a crane shot as the camera moves to a long shot of the city, this contrasts with the simple life wanting to be in the glamorous world of ballroom dancing as it proves there is more out there than ballroom dancing. At the pan pacifics the Scott’s mum and other ballroom dancers find out that Fran is Scott’s new partner and tries to convince her that if she does Scott won’t win. So to sum up Luhrmann uses the background to contrast between the world of ballroom dancing and the simple life.[/font]

[FONT='Arial','sans-serif']Meanwhile as Fran is being convinced to stop being partners with Scott we can that Luhrmann uses high and low angle shots to show authority and power of Scott’s mother and the other dancing over Fran. As they talk there is a low angle on Scott’s mother and the other dancer to represent they have power and in Fran’s reply there is a high angle to make Fran look small. Fran then decides to leave the pan pacifics so Scott can win the tournament with Tina Sparkle. Another person who has authority is Barry Fife the president of the dance federation. All in all, Luhrmann uses high and low angle shots to dignify who has power over Fran.[/font]

[FONT='Arial','sans-serif']As said before - (say something like 'In conclusion...') Barry Fife is the president of the dance federation. He is the bad guy of this movie we first see him when Scott dances his own steps in a tournament. “Sure you can dnace any steps you like, it doesn’t mean you… (close up of his mouth and the screen loses lighting) win” The reason why Barry Fife doesn’t want anyone to dance new steps is because he believes “If you don’t know the steps, you can’t teach it and we’ll all be out of a bloody job” [/font]
Overall i think ur doing too much story telling and not enough explanation of techniques and how it relates to the essay question. remember to answer the question and not simply condense all the notes u've written about the two text types into a couple of paragraphs. :read:
 

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