The Tone isn't right. Those Marshall MG amps are ok for dropped tunings... but not this kind of stuff. You need a decent distortion pedal (Boss MT-2 or similar... not a Behringer though) and probably need a Noise Suppressor.
Also there were quite a few times where you weren't nailing the rhythm quite on. It needs to be tighter with more controlled palm muting.
This also isn't a very good song on guitar. If you like Linkin Park, may I suggest... Place for my head, Points of Authority, Valentines Day and the little things give you away.
If you don't already know them, I'd also check out the lost prophets.