My creative story idea. (1 Viewer)

[Jessica_00]

Hey my creative story is about a little girl (around 12 yo) first getting her periods (menstration) and going through a mini inner imaginative physical journey all merged in one. Quote "Life was beautiful, simple and easy. Little did she know of the complication of growing up as a female until that morning as she woke up with a hot sticky patch of blood between her sheets. Fearing she had cut herself during the night, the little girl panicked and ran out of the bedroom screaming..."

What do you guys thing. Is it a bit too gore?

 

[albii]

A little yeah. Mabye you could do that story idea but a little more subtle, good uck in your exams

 

[Dr_Doom]

Yeah that will stand out for sure. FULL MARKS!

 

[sando]

yeh u wouldnt want to go into any more detail

 

[guernica3]

Be careful, although male markers try to be impartial. You don't want to do something to make a particular gender feel uneasy or awkward. It will subconsciously affect their opinion of the story.

 

[SiZmOs]

Be careful, although male markers try to be impartial. You don't want to do something to make a particular gender feel uneasy or awkward. It will subconsciously affect their opinion of the story.

Indeed.
Good luck, though. It sounds like a great idea. Let us know how you went!

 

[coldasice]

that was disgusting.

0/15 for you.
note that I am a male

 

[kazan]

that quote kinda made me uneasy, if you can maybe lower the detail, or infer it, instead of

as she woke up with a hot sticky patch of blood between her sheets



this turned me off it straight away.

less detail, more subtle hints, or inferral would definately work

 

[SiZmOs]

that was disgusting.

0/15 for you.
note that I am a male

your name preceedes you.

 

[Liminality]

i agree, a bit more subtle and it would be perfect

 

[Testpilot]

But you can't use that now because its all over the net and i bet someone has stolen your idea. So you lose.

 

[Jessica_00]

Well hey people, I mean I read a story about a fat girl who was so fat that her legs rubbing together gave her thighs a rash. I mean thats a little too much detail too but I guess it became an exemplar

 

[JustWin]

no offense but u wont get higher than 10/15 for an idea like that. try to stay away from teen angst? i know its bit late considering the AOS is today