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I have no idea who tf is "gmenoza". Have a nice day.

 

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my teacher gave me a 5/5, so i dont see whats wrong with it

Then it means that this whole thing is context specific. You should've only asked your teacher.

 

[MoonMonster196884]

I have no idea who tf is "gnemoza". Have a nice day.

should i write 'Inherent in the personified ‘world’' or 'to which the personified world has evolved' later on in the same paragraph

 

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I do admit though that your writing shows sophisticated thinking.

 

[jonolad69]

my teacher gave me a 5/5, so i dont see whats wrong with it

your teacher may be a fraud

 

[MoonMonster196884]

maybe u r a lil too young to understand the reflection

 

[MoonMonster196884]

should i write 'Inherent in the personified ‘world’' or 'to which the personified world has evolved' later on in the same paragraph

can some1 answer this qn?

 

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I'll say it again mate, you should always aim for concise in essay writing.

 

[katiekms]

my teacher gave me a 5/5, so i dont see whats wrong with it

you said you didn’t have a teacher

 

[gmenoza]

I have no idea who tf is "gmenoza". Have a nice day.

忽略这个人，他们是个昆虫

 

[gmenoza]

他们每天都来求我帮忙，因为他们无能

 

[MoonMonster196884]

他们每天都来求我帮忙，因为他们无能

bu er, 他不会给我数据

 

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Sorry, I re-read the whole thing and its actually quite good. Would probably give it a Band 5 level but jesus this whole thing is so hard to read I need to read it multiple times to let it make sense.

 

[spiderfan44]

i dont have a teacher

the fuck ya mean lad