Love Poem to a girl I like? (1 Viewer)

[Dream-Big]

hi my name is joey. i'm doing mechencial engineering at the University of techonology sydney and i'm first year. I really like this girl but I think she doesn't like me. i'm sad for this. that's why i will write her a poem, but i didn't do 4unit english, only standard english with a mark of band 2.

Love poem -

your eyes are wide closed
when my eyes are opened
why is this?
Is the your world not good for me
Or thy shall be no more?
CAPS! Ha! I suprised you!
For making this a sad moment for the
and shall my world not be with you
i will find another soul mate
and shall be greater than the
and i found the just now
and until and thy, i will find love
with thy,


Do you like my poem? sorry for the grammar and spelling, i don't like english but writing a poem might help her like me again..

I try to use words from shakespeare which makes it look smarted

thanks.name is joey

 

[Absolutezero]

Shall I compare thy poem to a summers day.
Thou art more temperate and lovely.

 

[enigma_1]

This doesn't make sense -_- You just broke English.

 

[User5555555]

I think its better to approach her, be friends, get close and confess...rather than write a poem. Lovey dovey stuff only works when you're dating her. Else, it may creep her out and distance herself from you..

 

[obliviousninja]

this guy is a troll

 

[Absolutezero]

this guy is a troll

No he's not

 

[Chronost]

I think you're better of using your strengths to attract her rather then your weaknesses, If you're not good at English then a poem might not be the best idea even if you tried your hardest.(i know this sounds bad, but it's true) Maybe your better at cooking? How about baking her some cookies and write a short letter with it , etc.. Edward is right in terms of something like this is better done when already dating but if you feel like the girl would accept something a little more traditional then by all means go for it! Otherwise just go for a classic sit next to her and chat approach

Even if this is troll,I know this stuff still happens lmao

 

[User5555555]

Troll or not, its still good to help someone out.

 

[TeresaManseau]

Not bad.

 

[obliviousninja]

Unless ur shakespeare dont go about writin love poems.

 

[JohnMaximus]

hi my name is joey. i'm doing mechencial engineering at the University of techonology sydney and i'm first year. I really like this girl but I think she doesn't like me. i'm sad for this. that's why i will write her a poem, but i didn't do 4unit english, only standard english with a mark of band 2.

Love poem -

your eyes are wide closed
when my eyes are opened
why is this?
Is the your world not good for me
Or thy shall be no more?
CAPS! Ha! I suprised you!
For making this a sad moment for the
and shall my world not be with you
i will find another soul mate
and shall be greater than the
and i found the just now
and until and thy, i will find love
with thy,


Do you like my poem? sorry for the grammar and spelling, i don't like english but writing a poem might help her like me again..

I try to use words from shakespeare which makes it look smarted

thanks.name is joey

 

[Gary_Oak]

Don't do poems, that is just piss lame and old skool