cal said:
Yeah I do, but I'll ease the pain of your nervous breakdown afterwards!
Hahaha, what an awkward come-on, hey.
Um well it'd probably be best if I do this when I haven't got a buzz on but I'll try my best. I think the problem isn't so much the points you're addressing, but rather how you're articulating them, it's lacking that "sophistication" that my teacher always harps on about.
Coleridge undertakes this journey (bah, try to avoid set-ups like this, see if you can reword this without mentioning the word journey) as a result of being unable to join his friends on a nature walk. Left to his own devices he transcends the physical journey his friends are currently experiencing and embarks on his own imaginary one,
visualising what he expects his friends to be seeing (that's really shit, I'm sorry, try rewording that completely because my brain is mush right now).
The composer relays this to the reader by utilising personification, the line "that branchless ash, Unsunn'd and damp, whose few poor yellow leaves Ne'er tremble in the gale" exemplifies a realism that is sustained throughout the poem whilst painting a literal portrait that is "brought to life" (I think there may be a better phrase to this but I cbf thinking of one, I'll get back to you here) to the audience. (I’d kind of expand on this point a bit more, like what you mean by “brought alive” and why it’s important, but since I don’t know what poem you’re doing I can’t really help you here lol)
That's not very good, meh, I'll edit this post again in like an hour and a bit lol