Is my title lame? (1 Viewer)

[JIMMYRECARD]

I've never been able to think of a title for my major work.
I sat.
I pondered.
I thought.


But nothing!!!!

NOTHING.
My mind was one blank abyss - a void.

But then it came to me!!!

And all rejoiced in celebration.
And then they were struck down with a startling revelation - the title may indeed be crap.

Rubbish.
Clique.
Pedestrian.
Convoluted.

Then the mighty BOS team jumped on the bandwagon, and confirmed/dismissed the poor damsel's greatest fears - her title was crap.

So my friends - determine my fate. Is my title crap?


(pick your favourite if you like the idea)
1) One flew in circles
2) It flew in circles
3) One flew around in circles
4) It flew around in circles
5) And it flew in circles
6) And it flew around in circles
7) And one flew around in circles
8) And one flew in circles

Be blunt.
Be honest.
Be truthful.

But first, I have to tell you that the language of my major work is very colloquial. But I'd rather not explain the concept, and just see your first impressions of it.

So come on guys.

Whaddya think?
Note: Not affraid of criticism

 

[YO!]

I've never been able to think of a title for my major work.
I sat.
I pondered.
I thought.


But nothing!!!!

NOTHING.
My mind was one blank abyss - a void.

But then it came to me!!!

And all rejoiced in celebration.
And then they were struck down with a startling revelation - the title may indeed be crap.

Rubbish.
Clique.
Pedestrian.
Convoluted.

Then the mighty BOS team jumped on the bandwagon, and confirmed/dismissed the poor damsel's greatest fears - her title was crap.

So my friends - determine my fate. Is my title crap?


(pick your favourite if you like the idea)
1) One flew in circles
2) It flew in circles
3) One flew around in circles
4) It flew around in circles
5) And it flew in circles
6) And it flew around in circles
7) And one flew around in circles
8) And one flew in circles

Be blunt.
Be honest.
Be truthful.

But first, I have to tell you that the language of my major work is very colloquial. But I'd rather not explain the concept, and just see your first impressions of it.

So come on guys.

Whaddya think?
Note: Not affraid of criticism

OK.

I wouldn't recommend you use any of the titles that begin with the word 'And', it just sounds...lame (for lack of better word).

The titles that begin with "One flew" sound like rip-offs of the "One Flew Over the Cockoo's Nest" title, which isn't good, because it sounds as if you've just copied it.

That leaves "It Flew in Circles", and "It flew Around In Circles", both of which I think sound terrible.

Maybe you could go with the above title of "circular flight", but I don't know, that might not fit your story.


That's it from me. Sorry for shooting down all your ideas.

 

[lyounamu]

Awesome titles usually begin with "the".
Example 1: The Pillars of the Earth
Example 2: The Lord of the Rings
Example 3: The Alchemist
Example 4: The Departed
Example 5: The Da Vinci Code
Example 6: The Kingdom of God is Within You

Awesome titles usually begin with awesome words
Example 1: Digital Fortress
Example 2: War and Peace
Example 3: King Lear

Awesome titles usually have an awesome phrase
Example 1: To Kill a Mockingbird

 

[Rhanoct]

lol.

op: i think adding "around" is a bit too much... One flew in circles sounds the best imo

 

[lyounamu]

Yeah use "The" great idea...you a fucking retard

I wasn't suggesting that.

 

[Zrap]

Love is like Circle

 

[jazzbaby]

it flew in circles

flying in circles

 

[sielz121]

its J.R Jimmy Recard, raise your glass for the king of the bar..

just use any of the lyrics in your title and you'll be sweet

 

[JIMMYRECARD]

OK.

I wouldn't recommend you use any of the titles that begin with the word 'And', it just sounds...lame (for lack of better word).

The titles that begin with "One flew" sound like rip-offs of the "One Flew Over the Cockoo's Nest" title, which isn't good, because it sounds as if you've just copied it.

That leaves "It Flew in Circles", and "It flew Around In Circles", both of which I think sound terrible.

Maybe you could go with the above title of "circular flight", but I don't know, that might not fit your story.


That's it from me. Sorry for shooting down all your ideas.

Don't be afraid to shoot it down. I don't really mind. I'd much rather get shot down here.

I hadn't thought of the 'one flew over the cuckoo's nest' but your right - does sound as if Ive copied it.

Must admit - I never as keen on the 'around' word - I prefer to be concise - a little to wordy for my taste
Looks like it's back to the drawing board.

I don't mind circular flight - but I don't think it complements my story very well. I don't know why, but for me it sounds a little masculine.

 

[JIMMYRECARD]

its J.R Jimmy Recard, raise your glass for the king of the bar..

just use any of the lyrics in your title and you'll be sweet

lol. That song was playing when I made my account

EDIT:
My story isn't about love - so sorry the love one doesn't really help.

And only if by 8.50 (need ten min to print) on the 22, will I use it flew in circles. (you're right. It does sound lame)

 

[u-borat]

:rofl:

 

[Jellymuncher]

yes. your title is lame
find a new one.

 

[marcquelle]

I like "It flew in circles"

its intriging whats flying and why in circles

I also reminds me of lost freedom/stuck in motion/uncertainity

 

[jenchowdhury]

personally i think all the names sound a bit basic, doesn't catch you straight away.

 

[emo-kid-91]

you should have called it "document1.doc".

 

[Classic Rudiger]

my title was the best
my three short stories
the overall title was called

Student Number: An Anthology

 

[Just.Snaz]

how bout just..

"Flying in Circles"

or "Fly"

or "Circles"

i duno

 

[kevinx2]

you should have called it "document1.doc".

Hahaha i like

"document1.docx" if you're some rich fancy Office 07

 

[emo-kid-91]

Hahaha i like

"document1.docx" if you're some rich fancy Office 07

ooh, you're right. pretentious. the markers would have lapped that up. man, why didn't i think of this?