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marcquelle

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thanks the ending is my second favorite part. My favourite is bernies line "i don't swing that way buddy..." piss my self whenever i hear it I made my message tone lols

thanks for commenting on my piano playing ( i did all of it, on the day lols )
 
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love it marquelle. i love the "you mean you must defecate?" thing and emotional guitar.

i loved the pope's contraceptive message and the crazy piano and all those wild screams...
and bra-burning garduation and the "boing" sound effect.

haha - simon says is best ending
crazy piano = awesome
 

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I'm still reading it and the more i do, the more i love it!
I love the way you've set this out. My favourites are call the dictionary! plasticity has a new meaning, retail therapy: a recognised practice, because you can’t eat endorphins, buy - i just keep writing more as i read them. Ah and pop memorabilia, paparazzinazi, your children and your children's children. I just love them all - you'd better get a fantastic mark! haha
Somehow I missed this earlier.

Thankyou so much for your awesome feedback. I really hope I do well, the amount of hours that went into that thing...gah!
 

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OMG so tranterisc. i thought the character was a man and then BAM a woman well done

I love your piece especially the pieces called: indifference, evolution and exorcism
 
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wow. i've skimmed through all of the ones on here and
WOW.
:jaw: Just amazing.

Congratulations on such fantastic works!
 

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Read through some of the work. They seem pretty good although I'm not a very good English judge. Congratulations to everyone finsihing their major work.
 

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contemplating whether or not to post anything up...

but shall willingly post up my friend's MW. seeing as she doesn't have an acc.

Medium: Short Story
Title: [Insert your name here]

hope you enjoy it as much as I did.

i'll put mine up....
soon....
maybe tomorrow.
no, this isn't procrastination.
 
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I did EX2 but I'm a bit hesitant to post mine up. I just know someone will find some horrific spelling mistake. I'm usually just a lurker on here...

BUT, from reading some of the other compositions I reckon there's going to be a few E4s.

I read one of the poetry works; "quick fix, cheap thrill". I was a little indifferent at first but the diction and word choice was pretty wonderful. The author definitely has a very good economy of words.
eg:

"It’s funny when the word ‘buy’ / fits comfortably in your mouth. / Sits just right.

All round good job I think.

I might go and read a few more...
 

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^^ skimmed over your friend's MW, i love it just from what i read!
 

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On another note, 30 views and no comments??
That's never reassuring...
 

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ahhh come on someone comment on mine the suspense is killing me :p

good stuff/bad stuff/ indifference is all appreciated :)
 

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Diametric: Really liked yours! I loved the concept and your writing style
 

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thanks accio.
did you read the RS as well, cause thats the one im worried about? most people's seem a helluva lot better.

i started reading yours last night when i was already sleepy. ill finish it off tonight and get back to you.
 

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I did EX2 but I'm a bit hesitant to post mine up. I just know someone will find some horrific spelling mistake. I'm usually just a lurker on here...

...
I'm a tad hesitant as well.
I refuse to reread mine incase i freak out about a massive mistake i know would be there.

at least it's one unit completely finished now right?
 

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thanks accio.
did you read the RS as well, cause thats the one im worried about? most people's seem a helluva lot better.

i started reading yours last night when i was already sleepy. ill finish it off tonight and get back to you.
Just read your RS, it's pretty decent and account of your research/links with EE1 is good. It's minor but I would've moved a few commas around lol. I really like your last paragraph though! If for some reason they don't like it (though it's not as bad as that..), I reckon the last sentence is enough for them to think it's wonderful! =]

thanks, i'd like to know what someone thinks...
 

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sorry accio.brain i thought i posted about yours last night lols i ended up putting it on facebook lols

i really your piece, especially the opening, its structure was really good and i liked how the dialogue flowed it seemed naturally but philospohical (if you get what i mean). Overall i think its a really strong piece, you should do well
 

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